I am a Year 7 student at Edmund Hillary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 10 and my teacher is Peta. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Tena koe Joshua, I really enjoyed this peom that you have made, it was a very lovely peom about the moon. I hope to see more of your SLJ work in the future, Keep up the good work Joshua!
I have to agree with Josh, it's beautiful. I was scrolling down through your post because I like to comment on the ones that catch my eye first and I had to pause on your poem. I really enjoy poetry and studied it as part of a creative writing course, so I've seen lots of professional poetry. Your poem is awesome, you've got a real knack for the rhythm and rhyme of it.
Do you play and instrument or sing? You sound like you've got some real music in you. I'd love for you to see if you can carry the poem on and just experiment and see what you come up with. let me know if you do cos I'd love to hear it.
Anywho, your post is really cool and I love the creativity and effort put in. Looking forward to reading through the rest of your posts. See you in the comments.
Tena koe Joshua, I really enjoyed this peom that you have made, it was a very lovely peom about the moon. I hope to see more of your SLJ work in the future, Keep up the good work Joshua!
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Hey Joshua,
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with Josh, it's beautiful. I was scrolling down through your post because I like to comment on the ones that catch my eye first and I had to pause on your poem. I really enjoy poetry and studied it as part of a creative writing course, so I've seen lots of professional poetry. Your poem is awesome, you've got a real knack for the rhythm and rhyme of it.
Do you play and instrument or sing? You sound like you've got some real music in you. I'd love for you to see if you can carry the poem on and just experiment and see what you come up with. let me know if you do cos I'd love to hear it.
Anywho, your post is really cool and I love the creativity and effort put in. Looking forward to reading through the rest of your posts. See you in the comments.
Daniel :)